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SAT Essay的写作技术

SAT Essay的写作技术

SATEssay有什么写作技术吗?楷励教育小编告诉大家,当然是有的,大家可以用快餐的方式去写,先收集材料,再把材料整合运用,当然了这个整合的过程中是少不了模板的。 所谓的用用快餐的方式去写,就像做一个三明治一样,把大家喜欢的几片蔬菜和一片牛肉混合在一起加入面包里面就好了。而做三明治的过程就好比是一个模板,只需要按照不走做就可以。因此,模板可以说是一项重... 阅读全文

SAT Essay有什么写作技术吗?楷励教育小编告诉大家,当然是有的,大家可以用快餐的方式去写,先收集材料,再把材料整合运用,当然了这个整合的过程中是少不了模板的。

所谓的用用快餐的方式去写,就像做一个三明治一样,把大家喜欢的几片蔬菜和一牛肉混合在一起加入面包里面。而做三明治的过程就好比是一个模板,只需要按照不走做就可以。因此,模板可以说是一项重要的写作技术,所以大家一定采用一个好的技术。

SAT Essay的写作技术

虽然模版是一个写作技术并不表示有了模版,大家一定可以好的SAT Essay。因为模板只是告诉大家一套思维方法,具体的还需要大家不断地练习形成一套自己的写作方式。有学多人经常会问,“我用某某人的写作模板,或者某某机构的模板,为什么还考不高分数?”当老师仔细看他们的文章时,发现他们完全是生搬硬套模板,没有灵活运用、创新,所以才会考不高分。面对失败,很多人都说模板是错误的,模板是写不出好的文章。其实,这种看法是错误的,不是模板写不出好的文章,主要是看大家如何利用模板来服务自己写作了。

那么大家该怎么使用它呢?每一个Essay包括五个段落,第一段Introduction最后一段Conclusion,这两段是永远不变的,即使是模板也改变不了的一个事实。例如,大家写一个议论文,议论文的Conclusion是五个段落中最有价值的一部分,为了得到一个Conclusion大家一定要用规范的结构来Introduction主题,然后用非常有力的事实来论证,然后经过一系列的论证得出一个结论,这样形成一个好的文章。这就是模板在写作中起到的作用,也即是给大家提供一个写作思路,大家根据这个思路填充自己的文章。

楷励教育小编在此提醒大家,写作备考初期可以多看模板,把握写作思路,逐渐形成自己的写作方式,但不能生搬硬套模板。

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TEEL---Planning is the key to an effective Essay

Planning is the key to an effective Essay Introduction (Provide context/background on the issue being discussed in the text, provide the text&s title, author, genre/form... 阅读全文

Planning is the key to an effective Essay

 

Introduction

 (Provide context/background on the issue being discussed in the text, provide the text’s title, author, genre/form, and place of publication, identify the author’s tone and contention, briefly introduce the key points of your discussion)

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Body

Paragraph 1 (Topic sentence > Explanation of PLTs used and intended Effect on the reader > provide Example)

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Paragraph 2 (Topic sentence > Explanation of PLTs used and intended Effect on the reader > provide Example)

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Paragraph 3 (Topic sentence > Explanation of PLTs used and intended Effect on the reader > provide Example) Note: Three body paragraphs is the minimum, your discussion may require more.

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Conclusion

(Summarise your discussion without adding new information and reach a conclusion)

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How to Approach the "Why" Essays

Start by asking yourself this:"Why should SCHOOL_NAME & a prestigious, respected, appealing institution with fantastic faculty, tremendous resources, a lovely campus, and a footbal... 阅读全文

Start by asking yourself this:

"Why should SCHOOL_NAME – a prestigious, respected, appealing institution with fantastic faculty, tremendous resources, a lovely campus, and a football team that plays on TV – admit you, out of a pool of eager, highly qualified candidates?"

 

Simply approach the "Why" essay as if you were in a job interview.  Sure, say why the school is great for you, but MUST also say why you're great for the school.  (Some schools, in fact, directly ask for this response.)  It's a two-way street, but many students don't realize this.  "I love you, I love you, I love you, you're the best school in the world!"  This type of response is not only ridiculous by American cultural standards; it often neglects to include why the school should love you back!

 

Americans like action.  That's our history, it's in our DNA.  So choose among these action words.  Yes, we like verbs.

 

Finally, be sure to write a narrative.  As with the Common App main essay, the "Why" essay should be a narrative.  Don't make it a Powerpoint presentation:  Do NOT use bullet points or listed items.  If you can make a reader laugh OR cry, you're on the right track.  Bottom line:  At the very least, you MUST communicate feelings, not just facts.

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A Winning Yale Admissions Essay (from the New York Times)

Here's the essay, followed by my observations. (FYI, it is NOT Gao Wenbin's essay.) But first, I must remind our readers that just because this student earned admission to Yale (wi... 阅读全文

Here's the essay, followed by my observations.  (FYI, it is NOT Gao Wenbin's essay.)  But first, I must remind our readers that just because this student earned admission to Yale (will a full scholarship), it doesn't mean it was because of her essay. She may have earned admission in spite of her Common App main essay. But let's give it a review.

 

"There it sits, sullen in the passenger's seat like a child in time out. Here we go again — someone else's laptop to navigate, another Wi-Fi network to hack, another stubborn connection to overcome. After a frustrating drive through the neighborhood and careful identification of a network, success is stated simply: Connected. It is a brief moment of victory, but short-lived as I race against the clock to complete my stack of assignments. Sure, it would be ideal to have my own Wi-Fi, but I’d be satisfied if my family obtained a home first. Every day there is a new challenge; it is a game of adaptation: I beat each situation before it beats me.

 

Just as in any game, I endure losses and gains. I can never forget the classic motel stays. The countless notes that stated in all capitals 'MUST EVACUATE BY 4PM' were my cues to negotiate with the manager to give us one more day to make our payments. I learned where $5 would buy enough food to feed a family of 5, bus routes, which neighbors were willing to give me rides to the college for my 7 a.m. class, which teachers were able to pick me up. I moved myself around the game board. I carried my family on my back.

 

During the bitter winter of 2012, I reached a dead end. My family was denied residence in a homeless shelter due to my mother's legal status. Finally, a stranger offered us refuge. Every night, my mother, sister, toddler brothers and I arranged ourselves on her kitchen floor and turned on the oven, hoping the warmth would embrace us through the night. What were we going to do? Surely, we couldn't live in front of an oven forever, but I couldn't see my next move.

 

My mother agreed it would be best for me to stay with a friend for a few days. I would have meals and a ride to school. I avoided the thought of what would happen to my brothers, and I made my way out to temporary stability. For a few moments, the weight of my family slid off my back, just long enough for me to regain my concentration and my faith in the future. I continually struggle with balancing my family's needs and my own, even though I know that in the end they are one and the same.

 

My whole existence is devoted to maximizing my potential. By tapping into a stranger's Wi-Fi, negotiating with hotel managers, accepting the kindness of strangers, and sometimes, just for a short time, putting my own needs before my family's, I fill the cracks in the road to success made by forces beyond myself. I won't let these circumstances victimize me. I won't let guilt paralyze me. I remain in control, making my moves, winning the game. Attending college is the surest path to victory, and I am prepared to play along until I reach the end."

 

My 2 cents:  Is it any surprise that this remarkable girl earned admission to Yale? Her life story is an extremely compelling one. She succeeded in her academics, she pursued her intellectual interests in spite of her family's hardships. She had to live in homeless shelters and motels. But she didn't just state that. She showed us by describing the feeling of what it was like to have to lived it. This is the kind of student who goes on to change the world, who rises above her circumstances to make a difference. If her grades and scores were just threshold level, she earned her admission to Yale based upon what we've gleaned from her Common App main essay. Her compelling narrative, her ability to overcome in spite of her circumstances, her desire for a first rate education, and her eloquent writing likely cemented her case for admission to one of America's most prestigious universities.

 

As you may know, AP English courses develop close reading and writing skills, some related to writing narratives, some related to writing an extended essay, some related to rhetorical discourse.  But if I had to give one piece of advice for writing the Common App main essay (which is often referred to, incorrectly, as a "Personal Statement"), it's that it should be a narrative.  So read a lot of narratives, well-written narratives.  (For example, remember when we used "Mother Tongue" as the reading for a narrative writing assignment?  We'll have many, many more of these -- and some have already been added to our SSync library.)  And practice writing YOUR narrative(s)This is what the Common App main essay is all about.


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从玻璃杯观贝类动物的玄妙世界 哈佛成功ESSAY赏析

从玻璃杯观贝类动物的玄妙世界 哈佛成功ESSAY赏析

参考资料:50 Successful Harvard Application Essays third Edition原文地址:一虾一人生一杯一世界 哈佛成功ESSAY之感悟人生轻轻的摇晃着玻璃杯,在灯光中闪着令人眩晕的光芒。技术员又一次转动着曲柄。空间狭小,所以每一个架子的最初设计都是可折叠的。平常不用的时候,它们折叠堆砌搁在一起就像掀起衣袖形成的皱纹一样... 阅读全文

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原文地址:一虾一人生一杯一世界 哈佛成功ESSAY之感悟人生

轻轻的摇晃着玻璃杯,在灯光中闪着令人眩晕的光芒。技术员又一次转动着曲柄。空间狭小,所以每一个架子的最初设计都是可折叠的。平常不用的时候,它们折叠堆砌搁在一起就像掀起衣袖形成的皱纹一样:紧张、期待。我站在一堆储藏试验品之间,等待着被相中的那一刻。我斜倚着浏览着一张泛黄的博物馆标签,然后慢慢往后挪一步开始整体欣赏:一个密封的玻璃器皿、琥珀色的酒精溶液以及幽灵般的甲壳类生物。摸上去,这些玻璃杯冰冷冷的,但是由于室内空间小的原因还是装置了防火设备,以防万一。

我的电子密钥卡上标记着一串字符:走入科学,史密森博物院(VISITING SCIENTIST, SMITHSONIAN INSTITUTION)。我曾经很高兴,虽然这里的门都带着特别的锁,但通常情况下只要轻轻一扣门就开了,但现在这把钥匙在我口袋里却有千斤重。我能感觉到身上的背包,那长方形的“躯壳”抵着我的脊柱,里面有一个装着电子测径器的盒子、珠宝商专用的镊子和一把带拉链的皮革袋手术刀、一架长期设置的微观数码照相机(主要是用来抓拍小型动物或生物的)、笔记本以及从流淌的河水里获取的奇形怪状的泥巴。

我端着第一个玻璃杯,将其放到实验台上。

从玻璃杯观贝类动物的玄妙世界 哈佛成功ESSAY赏析

当我拧开密封十几年的盖子时,耳边似乎听到了一个很奇怪的声音,似乎是我母亲,但其实是我自己发出的惊呼声“虾”?(听得出来,实在是太渺小了)。和超市里那些无头的灰色的死亡的贝类生物来说,这只“虾”又有什么样的意义呢?科学难道不是意味着研究癌症和研发仿真实验吗?为什么要约束自己?为什么不研究一些更大型的实验呢?

没错。我就是一个偏爱小家伙的科学家,我喜欢研究那些在世界野生动物基金会的海报上看不到的生物。而这样的生物是必须亲力亲为才能找到的(you’d have to get down on hands and knees to see at all)。我印象中第一次去动物园的时候,不是急着看大象和长颈鹿,相反的我却喜欢看各类的昆虫。5岁的时候,就常常在我家后院的草地上抓一些小型节肢动物然后把它们一个个放进事先准备好的玻璃杯中。我常常回想起来过去的一幕,每个周末去图书馆,翻阅一本本动物书刊,在阅读中领会昆虫的奇妙世界。

感觉似乎有点偏题,关于上个话题还是暂且写到这里吧!接下来还是说说杯中物吧!

我小心翼翼的把这只虾从密封的杯子里取出来。这十几年来它在里面一定很无聊现在尤其脆弱不堪。我用食指和大拇指用镊子把它夹出来搁置在空气中,欣赏着这只过去了大半个世纪的生物重现光明。

虾轻视自己。它是一只带刺的怪兽,一端长有锯齿,而另一端却有着象牙般的玫瑰花色尾巴。从它豆芽形状的眼部抽出几段细长的花束。它那弯曲的爪子就像芒刺云集的挂钩,而身体却有着像杏似的漂白色。入殓师的标签是一个潮湿的长方形羊皮纸。我用镊子翻转了写有文字的另一面:SANTA MARIA,墨西哥韦拉克鲁斯。 1894年2月14日(SANTA MARIA, VERACRUZ, MEXICO. FEBRUARY 14, 1894)。由于年代久远,墨迹已经很模糊了。

我来这里是要精确的测量其四肢和躯干。但是当卡钳转换角度在其壳上方时,我似乎觉得它还活着。奶油色的条纹裸露在身体的两侧,关节之间都是中国橙。我似乎看到了它的生长轨迹:从上游源头诞生的上百万个兄弟姐妹的浮游生物到童年时期棕榈树环绕的盐湖;我似乎看到它努力的上游,摸索着穿过瀑布和河岸,学会从苍鹭和男孩儿们的棍棒间成功躲闪,进入鲶鱼的隧道庇身;我似乎看到它在网里伸开爪子拼命挣扎的场景;我似乎看到它被随意的扔进充斥着福尔马林药水的试管里。它抽搐着扭曲的身体像被鱼叉插住的鲸鱼,药水溅得到处都是,也包括打捞它的人员,不一会儿功夫它就安静了下来。但其身体的颜色还是那么光鲜。

实验结束了。我关上了卡钳的不锈钢钳口。托盘里的刺和生物槽脊,曾经的水域到这次的实验之旅,像放幻灯片一样依次闪过。我摇了摇头。在这些小型的桡肢动物身上,我看到了如诗般的感觉。

ESSAY赏析

在无数的申请文书中,申请者概括的ESSAY佳作的特点主要集中于表现个人性格优势,做到透明、真实,但事实上不是所有的人都能够认真诚恳的在ESSAY中呈现自己。作者在文中描写的是19世纪晚期的一个试验品“虾”,感觉枯燥无味。但是,从标题可以看到作者讽刺的写作手法,一只死了大半个世纪的虾,作者却说它依然活着。生命的激情大多存在于坚硬的刺和外壳下面,而生命之河回荡在意想不到的地方。通过对古甲壳虫的具体细节描写,让读者信服除它之外很少会有人会去近距离关注它。虽然,整体来看作者是在描写一只死了的虾,但事实上我们却可以感受到他对于科学的激情。作者并没有直接告诉读者他的学术爱好,但是,这只虾已经道出了全部。

作者在最后一句点名“In these swimmerets, there is poetry”,他的话里有话。虽然作者在文章开头描写的晦涩难懂,但在接下来的文章里他能够跳转笔锋直接进入科学的话题。他没有一味的炫技,而是通过词语、句子让读者跟着他的描述一起体会虾的生活。字里行间都流露出了最真挚的情感,这是最大的特点。

全文最特别的除了用词外就是那段一系列的排比”I see…”。” Its creepy antennae “sprout” like a “bouquet,” and its tail flukes are like an’ivory rose.’”从这里可以看到作者的写作天赋。作者就是这样和大家一同分享虾的同时点名了自己对人生的种种看法;其独特的写作视角让人们足矣信服他的学术优势。

—Esther Yi

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(26)ALEX KIM—“STILL LIFE”

Barely sloshing, my jars shudder into the light. The technician turns the crank once more. Space is precious here, so these shelves are collapsible. At rest, they bunch up like the wrinkles in my pulled-up sleeves—tense, expectant. Waiting for someone like me, who’ll edge in between them, lean in to scan a yellowed museum label, then step back to take it in all at once: the sealed glass containers, the amber-stained alcohol and the ghostly crustaceans within. These jars are cool to my touch, and the room is fireproofed against their contents.

My electronic card key says VISITING SCIENTIST, SMITHSONIAN INSTITUTION. I had smiled at how smoothly the padlocked doors clicked open, but now the key is oddly heavy in my pocket. Through my backpack, familiar rectangular lumps nestle against my spine. The boxy case of my electronic calipers. Jeweler’s tweezers and a scalpel in a zippered leather pouch. A digital camera, forever set to macro (to capture tiny bristles and spines). My notebooks, muddy and misshapen from run-ins with river water.

I set the first jar on my worktable.

As I twist open a lid sealed decades before my birth (it feels like desecration), I hear a doubtful voice, mostly my mother’s—but my own as well. Shrimp? (The very word, I know, smacks of insignificance.) What’s more to shrimp than dead shellfish, headless and gray on a briny slab of supermarket ice? Isn’t science supposed to be cancer and computer simulations? Why limit yourself—why not study something big?

Yes, I always was drawn to the “small things,” the creatures you’d never see on a World Wildlife Fund poster—that you’d have to get down on hands and knees to see at all. On my first visit to the zoo, elephants and giraffes barely registered; I plowed through that throng of knees straight to the insect house. Aged five, in the tall grass behind our house, I filled dozens of jam jars with the plink of tiny jointed claws. I think back to those early weekly trips to the library, of clutching books with titles like Spineless Wonders and Insect Masquerades. I pause.

Gingerly, I lift him from the jar of preservative. The years have wearied him, turned him brittle. With index finger and thumb, I tug the stirring sleeper into air that knew him last half a continent and a century before.

Shrimp belittles him. He is a spiny beast tipped at one end with a saw-toothed prow and at the other with a fluked tail like the petals of an ivory rose. From between his stalked eyes sprouts a spindly bouquet of antennae. His fingers curve like thorn-studded hooks and his bleached flesh is the color of apricots. The mortician’s tag is a soggy rectangle of parchment. With my jeweler’s forceps, I flip it to read the spidery cursive on its other face. SANTA MARIA, VERACRUZ, MEXICO. FEBRUARY 14, 1894. The ink has barely run.

I am here to reduce him to measurements of limbs and trunk, to a data point. But as I angle my calipers over his shell, I see him as he was in life, cream-colored stripes streaking his sides and China orange in all his many joints. I see him in his infancy, a speck of plankton flushed with a million siblings from the headwaters of his birth to the palm-fringed lagoon of his childhood. I see him make the long slog upstream, scrabbling up cascades and over riverbanks, learning to shelter from herons and stick-wielding boys in undercut banks and catfish tunnels. I see him raising his outspread claws as the naturalist’s dip-net looms overhead. I see him at the moment of death, thrown unceremoniously into a tub of formalin. He flexes like a harpooned whale, splashing his collector’s cotton shirt, and then is quiet. The color’s still fresh in his shell.

Measurements finished, I snap shut the stainless-steel jaws of my calipers. The spines and fluted ridges of the creature on my tray, this time traveler from bygone waters, murmur softly to my eyes. Limiting myself? I shake my head. In these swimmerets, there is poetry.

COMMENTARY

Applicants often make the assumption that the best college essays showcase an individual’s personal strengths and successes in a highly transparent and shamelessly triumphant manner, not realizing that people can often reveal their true and most vibrant colors by taking a more oblique approach in writing about themselves. This is the method employed by this applicant, and to great effect. The entire piece revolves around the simple act of examining a preserved shrimp from the late 1800s: surely one of the dullest—not to mention, literally lifeless—topics one can choose to expound upon. However, the writer capitalizes upon the irony of the situation, as evinced by the clever title, “Still Life,” to suggest that vivacity exists beneath that spiny and crusty exterior, and that life reverberates in unexpected places. Through his exposition about the ancient crustacean, he adeptly convinces readers that he possesses the rare insight that allows him to perceive life in places where few others would see it. His essay may be about a shrimp, but it is actually a meditation on his unique ability to revivify the dead and unstudied through his sincere passion for the sciences. The writer does not simply inform the reader of his academic interests; rather, he conveys the very impact of such passions on his vision of the world around him.

He writes, “In these swimmerets, there is poetry”—and his language deftly proves as much. That said, there is always a risk in beginning an essay too obliquely and leaving the reader confused and disoriented, which the writer does, but he manages it by quickly providing a setting and context for his scene in the very next paragraph. The applicant does not simply describe for the sake of showing how well he can write; he uses his language with the pointed motivation of displaying, through words, the life he sees in the preserved shrimp. His descriptive language is effective not merely for its richness and creativity, but for its ability to evoke his feelings.

An especially strong passage is when he describes the shrimp as he sees it. Its creepy antennae “sprout” like a “bouquet,” and its tail flukes are like an “ivory rose.” The writer indeed brings poetry to the most unexpected of items. His essay invites readers to share his vision of the shrimp and to understand how he sees life, and through the uniqueness of this perspective, this applicant persuades readers that he possesses a vision that few other applicants can boast of.

—Esther Yi

 

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小野在很小的时候从她奶奶这里学会了一套评判标准,那就是害虫和益虫。有天我正吃饭,她突然从旁边飞身而出,口中大喊一句,害虫,打死。然后一只飞蛾就被她拍死了。 我大吃一惊,说:我去,小野,这是不对的。 这句话的结果就是小野又学会了一句&我去&。 她说:我去,是奶奶说的。 这是... 阅读全文

小野在很小的时候从她奶奶这里学会了一套评判标准,那就是害虫和益虫。有天我正吃饭,她突然从旁边飞身而出,口中大喊一句,害虫,打死。然后一只飞蛾就被她拍死了。

我大吃一惊,说:我去,小野,这是不对的。

这句话的结果就是小野又学会了一句“我去”。

她说:我去,是奶奶说的。

这是我一直想和她探讨的一个观点,但我想了很久也没找到合适的措辞。为此我和我母亲还争辩过:对于那些虫族,所谓的有害与有益都是相对人类而言,但你让小孩子有了这种二元对立非黑即白贴上标签即可捕杀的想法,并不利于她的身心。我母亲反驳道:那蚊子咬她怎么办,难道还要养起来?害虫就是害虫,小孩子不能好坏不分,《农夫与蛇》的故事你听过没有?

毫无疑问,这事一时争不出个结果。但小野飞身杀虫让我很生气。我站了起来,以前所未有的严厉再次责问她:你可以么?你可以这样做么?

她从未见我如此,退了一步,有点畏怯道:它是坏的小动物,它是苍蝇。(那时候她把一切在空中飞的小昆虫都叫苍蝇。)

我突然思路开朗,构建出了关于此事完整的哲学体系:什么叫坏的,什么叫好的?伤害你的小动物就是坏的,不伤害你的小动物就是好的。这个飞飞的小动物伤害你了么?你把它打死了,它的家人找不到它了,会很难过知道么?你不可以伤害它们,如果它们没有伤害你,知道了么?你这样做,它会很痛苦,所以你错了,你要做那些让它很快乐的事情,你知道么?你想想,如果你找不到家人了,你会难过么?

也许是我语气太严肃,小野突然一句不说,两眼通红,凝滞几秒,瞬间大哭了出来。

我没有即刻安慰她,继续追问:你说,你做错了么?
小野已经哭得没法说一句完整的句子,但抽泣之中,她还是断断续续说,我错了。
我上前抚了抚她的脑袋,语气缓和道:那你现在要做什么呢?
小野哭着走到那只飞蛾那里,蹲下身子说:对不起,你很痛苦。
看着她好几滴眼泪都落到地板上,我心疼不已,更怕她为此反而留下更大的心理创伤,便心生一计,说:别哭了,我们一起帮助它好么?
小野噙着泪水,道:好。

我把飞蛾捡起,带上小铲子,牵上小野到了一片土地。我挖了一个小坑,让小野把飞蛾扔了进去,顺便也告诉她,这是飞蛾,不是苍蝇。我教小野把土盖上以后说,这只飞蛾以前是个动物,现在它死了,我们把它埋了起来,它就会变成一朵花,变成另外一种生命,就不会再痛苦了。小野,你快去拿你的水壶来,我们要浇水了。

小野飞奔入屋。

我瞬间起身,跑到十几米外摘了一朵花(罪过罪过),折返回去,把花插在刚才埋飞蛾的地方。完成这个动作,小野正好提着水壶从屋里出来。她走到那朵花前,惊诧得说不出话。我说:你看,就在刚才,它变成了一朵花长了出来,说明它已经原谅你了。

小野破涕为笑,依偎到我怀里,说:它这么快就有了花。
我亲了她一口,说:是啊,我们又是它的好朋友了。它很快长了出来,说明它很快乐。
小野开心地笑了。
我说,别难过了小野,那只飞蛾变成了花,现在就像我们一样快乐。

夕阳洒下,我抱起她,走向远方。我想,所谓教育,也许就是这样,爱与耐心,加上孩子能明白的方式。这世界不是那么好,也不是那么坏,但这世界上的很多东西不能只用好或者坏来形容。初秋,已经开始吹起凉风,但此情此景能温暖一切。

她轻轻贴到我的耳边,说:嗯,爸爸,那我们再去打一个飞蛾吧

                                                                                                             转自 :韩寒

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  Essay在你本科申请的过程中它的地位是非常重要的,有几个问题我想先跟大家说一下~   首先Essay重要到什么地步呢?   Essay的重要性是你本科申请过程可以占到总过程的二分之一~   其次是Essay主要考察什么呢?  其实Essay主要考察一个人的思维方式,思维方式是国外院校比较重视的一方面,它是性格,情感,智... 阅读全文

  Essay在你本科申请的过程中它的地位是非常重要的,有几个问题我想先跟大家说一下~

   首先Essay重要到什么地步呢?

  Essay的重要性是你本科申请过程可以占到总过程的二分之一~

   其次是Essay主要考察什么呢?
   其实Essay主要考察一个人的思维方式,思维方式是国外院校比较重视的一方面,它是性格,情感,智力和道德的综合反映,学校会通过这些因素来评估申请人是否具有潜力,也就是说学校更看重申请人灵魂里的东西以及对生活的态度。一般字数要求500words以内。

   上面的两个问题呢是让很多同学纠结的问题,看这个Essay都感觉无从下手,那我们就针对Essay问题做一个详细解析吧,然后还会附赠Essay优秀范文哦~

  我们把大学规定的TOPIC做一个简单的归纳,然后就会发现除了少数几个学校的Essay话题稍显另类之外,其他大部分学校一般都会提出或者涉及如下几类Essay要求:回忆类,描述你的成长经历,自省类,启发类,憧憬类等等。下面做一下简单的举例:

   1.评价你的一个重要经历、成就、风险决定、或者你曾面对的两难选择的经历,并评价对你造成的影响。英文原文是:Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.

  2.讨论某个个人的、地区性的、国家 性的、或国际性的关注话题以及对你的重要性。英文原文是:Discuss some issue of personal, local, national, or international concern and its importance to you.

  3.说明一个对你有重要影响的人并描述对你的影响。英文原文是:Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence.

   4.描述一个影响你的人物并说明对你的影响,该人物可以是小说中的、历史中的、或者某创新性作品(比如在艺术、音乐、科学等方面)中的。英文原文 是:Describe a character in fiction, a historical figure, or a creative work (as in art, music, science, etc.) that has had an influence on you, and explain that influence.

  5.一系列诸如学术兴趣、个人前途、生活经历等能够显著增添教育多样性的 事情。结合你个人的背景,描述一个可以说明你将会带给大学社区的多元化带来何种贡献的经历,或者一个表明多元化对你有重要意义的经历。英文原文是:A range of academic interests, personal perspectives, and life experiences adds much to the educational mix. Given your personal background, describe an experience that illustrates what you would bring to the diversity in a college community, or an encounter that demonstrated the importance of diversity to you.

  6.题目自拟

  更多essay写作技巧及范文,请点击http://www.eduwo.com/instruments/index.htm页面。

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  “Growing Up”

   I’m short. I’m five foot five – well, five foot six if I want to impress someone. If the average height of American men is five foot ten, that means I’m nearly half a foot shorter than the average Joe out there. And then there are the basketball players. My height has always been something that’s set me apart; it’s helped define me. It’s just that as long as I can remember, I haven’t liked the definition very much. Every Sunday in grade school my dad and I would watch ESPN Primetime Football. Playing with friends at home, I always imagined the booming ESPN voice of Chris Berman giving the play-by-play of our street football games. But no matter how well I performed at home with friends, during school recess the stigma of “short kid” stuck with me while choosing teams.

  开头简单明了,吸引人。谈身高很矮曾经使他被伙伴排除在外;谈到自己喜欢看ESPN的节 目,并谈到自己曾经想象着ESPN的解说员Chris Berman能给他和伙伴的足球比赛来一次现场解说。也说到即便自己足球的表现很优秀,在校队选队员的时候,他也还是被贴上“小个子”的标签。对自己的情 况有认知,有小孩天马行空的想法。令人耳熟能详的ESPN和解说员Chris Berman也容易引起读者的共鸣。

  Still concerned as senior year rolled along, I visited a growth specialist. Pacing the exam room in a shaky, elliptical orbit worried, “What if I’ve stopped growing? Will my social status forever be marked by my shortness?” In a grade school dream, I imagined Chris “ESPN” Berman’s voice as he analyzed the fantastic catch I had made for a touchdown when – with a start – the doctor strode in. damp with nervous sweat, I sat quietly with my mom as he showed us the X-ray taken of my hand. The bones in my seventeen-year-old body had matured. I would not grow any more. Whoa. I clenched the steering wheel in frustration as I drove home. What good were my grades and “college transcript” achievements when even my friends poked fun of the short kid? What good was it to pray, or to genuinely live a life of love? No matter how many Taekwondo medals I had won, could I ever be considered truly athletic in a wiry, five foot five frame? I could be dark and handsome, but could I ever be the “tall” in “tall, dark and handsome”? All I wanted was someone special to look up into my eyes; all I wanted was someone to ask, “Could you reach that for me?” 讲述自己去检查身体的过程,提出“如果我不能长高可怎么办”,然后马上列出自己的一个想象:由于有优势的身高,完成了完美的接球。然后突然转折,说到自己 得知再也不会长高。I clenched the steering wheel in frustration as I drove home.这句话也让人仿佛看到shim沮丧的样子。他觉得如果自己无法再长高,那即便自己再成功,又有什么意义呢?读到这,读者就很想知道,接下来 shim的这些疑问是怎么解答的。

  It’s been hard to deal with. I haven’t answered all those questions, but I have learned that height isn’t all it’s made out to be. I ‘d rather be a shorter, compassionate person than a tall tyrant. I can be a giant in so many other ways: intellectually, spiritually and emotionally.

  Shim没有直接回答上面提出的问题,但是他得出了自己的结论,也许自己身高不可能再长高,但是他可以成为知识的巨人、精神上的巨人或感情上的巨人。

   I’ve ironically grown taller from being short. It’s enriched my life. Being short has certainly had its advantages. During elementary school in earthquake-prone California for example, my teachers constantly praised my “duck and cover” skills. The school budget was tight and the desks were so small an occasional limb could always be seen sticking out. Yet Chris Shim, “blessed” in height, always managed to squeeze himself into a compact and safe fetal position. The same quality has paid off in hide-and-go-seek. (I’m the unofficial champion on my block.)

   这段讲到shim发现其实矮也有矮的好。比如,在地震的时候,他可以灵活自如的躲到别人躲不进去的桌子下面,而且在社区里,他也是捉迷藏时的“非正式冠 军”。他用这种看上去有些自嘲的方式展示了自己的乐观积极。值得一提的是,shim还提到The school budget was tight and the desks were so small 这种非常细节的信息,非常有趣幽默。

  Lincoln once debated with Senator Stephen A. Douglas – a magnificent orator, nationally recognized as the leader of the Democratic Party of 1858… and barely five feet four inches tall. It seems silly, but standing on the floor of the Senate last year I remembered Senator Douglas and imagined that I would one day debate with a 4 future president. (It helped to have a tall, lanky, bearded man with a stove-top hat talk with me that afternoon.) But I could just as easily become an astronaut, if not for my childlike, gaping-mouth-eyes-straining wonderment of the stars, then maybe in the hope of growing a few inches (the spine spontaneously expands in the absence of gravity). 主要讲述自己在政治上和天文上的兴趣,同样描写生动的细节。

   Even at five feet, six inches, the actor Dustin Hoffman held his own against Tome Cruise in the movie Rainman and went on to win his second Academy Award for Best Actor. Michael J. Fox (5’5”) constantly uses taller actors to his comedic advantage. Height has enhanced the athleticism of “Muggsy” Bogues, the shortest player in the history of the NBA at five foot three. He’s used that edge to lead his basketball team in steals (they don’t call him “Muggsy” for nothing). Their height has put no limits to their work in the arts or athletics. Neither will mine.

  shim列举了两个很成功的“矮个子”的成功人士,一方面表明他用这些人物来激励自己,二是他似乎让我们看到了他未来的样子。

   I’m five foot five. I’ve struggled with it at times, but I’ve realized that being five-five can’t stop me from joining the Senate. It won’t stem my dream of becoming an astronaut (I even have the application from NASA). My height can’t prevent me from directing a movie and excelling in Taekwondo (or even basketball). At five foot five I can laugh, jump, run, dance, write, paint, help, volunteer, pray, love and cry. I can break 100 in bowling. I can sing along to Nat King Cole. I can recite Audrey Hepburn’s lines from Breakfast at Tiffany’s. I can run the mile in under six minutes, dance like a wild monkey and be hopelessly wrapped up in a good book (though I have yet to master the ability to do it all at once). I’ve learned that my height, even as a defining characteristic, is only a part of the whole. It won’t limit me. Besides, this way I’ll never outgrow my favorite sweater.

  他曾经因为自己的身高而困 扰,但是他现在意识到身高的问题不会阻挡他的任何一个愿望和理想,身高只是生命和生活的一小部分而已。在结尾,shim也没有抒情或者使用假大空的句式, 一句简单的Besides, this way I’ll never outgrow my favorite sweater.将他幽默风趣的性格特点展示地淋漓尽致,引人会心一笑。

  总结分析:

  《长大》这篇essay形式 上讨论了申请者(Shim)的身高问题和性格特点,事实上深度挖掘了以上两点对其人生的影响。Shim的写作方式让读者感受到身高给他带来的挫败感,在他 与家人、朋友和同龄人的相处中,这个身体上的特点对他看待自己的方式上起了至关重要的作用。这篇essay成功主要是因为其坦诚、直接和切中要害的特点。 文章的开头“我很矮”很清晰的向读者传递了文章的主旨信息。随着文章的继续,shim表露了他的内心感受和很多愿望,他让我们切身感受到他在得知自己再也 不会长高时那一刻的心情,读者仿佛在一段旅程中了解到shim的变化。身材矮小塑造影响了shim的世界观,并且没有削弱他追求自己目标的信念。他能意识 到身材矮小的优劣势,最可贵的是,他能用一种非常有深度的方式将这些优劣势表达清楚。此外,这篇essay不仅让我们看到shim对于身材矮小的一些想 法,重要的是,他让我们看到了他在政治、太空探索、体育和艺术等多方面的兴趣。Shim并没直说他的身高如何没有限制他,但是他用事实来说明了他的身高为 何没有限制他。

  更多essay写作技巧及范文,请点击http://www.eduwo.com/instruments/index.htm页面。

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Essay在你本科申请的过程中它的地位是非常重要的,有几个问题我想先跟大家说一下~

   首先Essay重要到什么地步呢?
   Essay的重要性是你本科申请过程可以占到总过程的二分之一~

   其次是Essay主要考察什么呢?
   其实Essay主要考察一个人的思维方式,思维方式是国外院校比较重视的一方面,它是性格,情感,智力和道德的综合反映,学校会通过这些因素来评估申请人是否具有潜力,也就是说学校更看重申请人灵魂里的东西以及对生活的态度。一般字数要求500words以内。

上面的两个问题呢是让很多同学纠结的问题,看这个Essay都感觉无从下手,那我们就针对Essay问题做一个详细解析吧,然后还会附赠Essay优秀范文哦~

  我们把大学规定的TOPIC做一个简单的归纳,然后就会发现除了少数几个学校的Essay话题稍显另类之外,其他大部分学校一般都会提出或者涉及如下几类Essay要求:回忆类,描述你的成长经历,自省类,启发类,憧憬类等等。下面做一下简单的举例:

   1.评价你的一个重要经历、成就、风险决定、或者你曾面对的两难选择的经历,并评价对你造成的影响。英文原文是:Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.

  2.讨论某个个人的、地区性的、国家 性的、或国际性的关注话题以及对你的重要性。英文原文是:Discuss some issue of personal, local, national, or international concern and its importance to you.

  3.说明一个对你有重要影响的人并描述对你的影响。英文原文是:Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence.

   4.描述一个影响你的人物并说明对你的影响,该人物可以是小说中的、历史中的、或者某创新性作品(比如在艺术、音乐、科学等方面)中的。英文原文 是:Describe a character in fiction, a historical figure, or a creative work (as in art, music, science, etc.) that has had an influence on you, and explain that influence.

  5.一系列诸如学术兴趣、个人前途、生活经历等能够显著增添教育多样性的 事情。结合你个人的背景,描述一个可以说明你将会带给大学社区的多元化带来何种贡献的经历,或者一个表明多元化对你有重要意义的经历。英文原文是:A range of academic interests, personal perspectives, and life experiences adds much to the educational mix. Given your personal background, describe an experience that illustrates what you would bring to the diversity in a college community, or an encounter that demonstrated the importance of diversity to you.

  6.题目自拟

  更多essay写作技巧及范文,请点击http://www.eduwo.com/instruments/index.htm页面。

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  下面留学小编给大家整理了一篇哈佛大学优秀essay原文及解析:

  “Growing Up”

   I’m short. I’m five foot five – well, five foot six if I want to impress someone. If the average height of American men is five foot ten, that means I’m nearly half a foot shorter than the average Joe out there. And then there are the basketball players. My height has always been something that’s set me apart; it’s helped define me. It’s just that as long as I can remember, I haven’t liked the definition very much. Every Sunday in grade school my dad and I would watch ESPN Primetime Football. Playing with friends at home, I always imagined the booming ESPN voice of Chris Berman giving the play-by-play of our street football games. But no matter how well I performed at home with friends, during school recess the stigma of “short kid” stuck with me while choosing teams.

  开头简单明了,吸引人。谈身高很矮曾经使他被伙伴排除在外;谈到自己喜欢看ESPN的节 目,并谈到自己曾经想象着ESPN的解说员Chris Berman能给他和伙伴的足球比赛来一次现场解说。也说到即便自己足球的表现很优秀,在校队选队员的时候,他也还是被贴上“小个子”的标签。对自己的情 况有认知,有小孩天马行空的想法。令人耳熟能详的ESPN和解说员Chris Berman也容易引起读者的共鸣。

  Still concerned as senior year rolled along, I visited a growth specialist. Pacing the exam room in a shaky, elliptical orbit worried, “What if I’ve stopped growing? Will my social status forever be marked by my shortness?” In a grade school dream, I imagined Chris “ESPN” Berman’s voice as he analyzed the fantastic catch I had made for a touchdown when – with a start – the doctor strode in. damp with nervous sweat, I sat quietly with my mom as he showed us the X-ray taken of my hand. The bones in my seventeen-year-old body had matured. I would not grow any more. Whoa. I clenched the steering wheel in frustration as I drove home. What good were my grades and “college transcript” achievements when even my friends poked fun of the short kid? What good was it to pray, or to genuinely live a life of love? No matter how many Taekwondo medals I had won, could I ever be considered truly athletic in a wiry, five foot five frame? I could be dark and handsome, but could I ever be the “tall” in “tall, dark and handsome”? All I wanted was someone special to look up into my eyes; all I wanted was someone to ask, “Could you reach that for me?” 讲述自己去检查身体的过程,提出“如果我不能长高可怎么办”,然后马上列出自己的一个想象:由于有优势的身高,完成了完美的接球。然后突然转折,说到自己 得知再也不会长高。I clenched the steering wheel in frustration as I drove home.这句话也让人仿佛看到shim沮丧的样子。他觉得如果自己无法再长高,那即便自己再成功,又有什么意义呢?读到这,读者就很想知道,接下来 shim的这些疑问是怎么解答的。

  It’s been hard to deal with. I haven’t answered all those questions, but I have learned that height isn’t all it’s made out to be. I ‘d rather be a shorter, compassionate person than a tall tyrant. I can be a giant in so many other ways: intellectually, spiritually and emotionally.

  Shim没有直接回答上面提出的问题,但是他得出了自己的结论,也许自己身高不可能再长高,但是他可以成为知识的巨人、精神上的巨人或感情上的巨人。

   I’ve ironically grown taller from being short. It’s enriched my life. Being short has certainly had its advantages. During elementary school in earthquake-prone California for example, my teachers constantly praised my “duck and cover” skills. The school budget was tight and the desks were so small an occasional limb could always be seen sticking out. Yet Chris Shim, “blessed” in height, always managed to squeeze himself into a compact and safe fetal position. The same quality has paid off in hide-and-go-seek. (I’m the unofficial champion on my block.)

   这段讲到shim发现其实矮也有矮的好。比如,在地震的时候,他可以灵活自如的躲到别人躲不进去的桌子下面,而且在社区里,他也是捉迷藏时的“非正式冠 军”。他用这种看上去有些自嘲的方式展示了自己的乐观积极。值得一提的是,shim还提到The school budget was tight and the desks were so small 这种非常细节的信息,非常有趣幽默。

  Lincoln once debated with Senator Stephen A. Douglas – a magnificent orator, nationally recognized as the leader of the Democratic Party of 1858… and barely five feet four inches tall. It seems silly, but standing on the floor of the Senate last year I remembered Senator Douglas and imagined that I would one day debate with a 4 future president. (It helped to have a tall, lanky, bearded man with a stove-top hat talk with me that afternoon.) But I could just as easily become an astronaut, if not for my childlike, gaping-mouth-eyes-straining wonderment of the stars, then maybe in the hope of growing a few inches (the spine spontaneously expands in the absence of gravity). 主要讲述自己在政治上和天文上的兴趣,同样描写生动的细节。

   Even at five feet, six inches, the actor Dustin Hoffman held his own against Tome Cruise in the movie Rainman and went on to win his second Academy Award for Best Actor. Michael J. Fox (5’5”) constantly uses taller actors to his comedic advantage. Height has enhanced the athleticism of “Muggsy” Bogues, the shortest player in the history of the NBA at five foot three. He’s used that edge to lead his basketball team in steals (they don’t call him “Muggsy” for nothing). Their height has put no limits to their work in the arts or athletics. Neither will mine.

  shim列举了两个很成功的“矮个子”的成功人士,一方面表明他用这些人物来激励自己,二是他似乎让我们看到了他未来的样子。

   I’m five foot five. I’ve struggled with it at times, but I’ve realized that being five-five can’t stop me from joining the Senate. It won’t stem my dream of becoming an astronaut (I even have the application from NASA). My height can’t prevent me from directing a movie and excelling in Taekwondo (or even basketball). At five foot five I can laugh, jump, run, dance, write, paint, help, volunteer, pray, love and cry. I can break 100 in bowling. I can sing along to Nat King Cole. I can recite Audrey Hepburn’s lines from Breakfast at Tiffany’s. I can run the mile in under six minutes, dance like a wild monkey and be hopelessly wrapped up in a good book (though I have yet to master the ability to do it all at once). I’ve learned that my height, even as a defining characteristic, is only a part of the whole. It won’t limit me. Besides, this way I’ll never outgrow my favorite sweater.

  他曾经因为自己的身高而困 扰,但是他现在意识到身高的问题不会阻挡他的任何一个愿望和理想,身高只是生命和生活的一小部分而已。在结尾,shim也没有抒情或者使用假大空的句式, 一句简单的Besides, this way I’ll never outgrow my favorite sweater.将他幽默风趣的性格特点展示地淋漓尽致,引人会心一笑。

  总结分析:

  《长大》这篇essay形式 上讨论了申请者(Shim)的身高问题和性格特点,事实上深度挖掘了以上两点对其人生的影响。Shim的写作方式让读者感受到身高给他带来的挫败感,在他 与家人、朋友和同龄人的相处中,这个身体上的特点对他看待自己的方式上起了至关重要的作用。这篇essay成功主要是因为其坦诚、直接和切中要害的特点。 文章的开头“我很矮”很清晰的向读者传递了文章的主旨信息。随着文章的继续,shim表露了他的内心感受和很多愿望,他让我们切身感受到他在得知自己再也 不会长高时那一刻的心情,读者仿佛在一段旅程中了解到shim的变化。身材矮小塑造影响了shim的世界观,并且没有削弱他追求自己目标的信念。他能意识 到身材矮小的优劣势,最可贵的是,他能用一种非常有深度的方式将这些优劣势表达清楚。此外,这篇essay不仅让我们看到shim对于身材矮小的一些想 法,重要的是,他让我们看到了他在政治、太空探索、体育和艺术等多方面的兴趣。Shim并没直说他的身高如何没有限制他,但是他用事实来说明了他的身高为 何没有限制他。

  更多essay写作技巧及范文,请点击http://www.eduwo.com/instruments/index.htm页面。

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